Do you guys think this would be a good movie plot?

Do you guys think this would be a good movie plot?
I'm in an Advanced Video Productions Class at school, and as a finals project last semester we made movie trailers. Mine was simply an action/comedy that I titled. "Fortunes". The basic summary is that this kid accidentally stumbles upon a map to a fortune buried by the town founder 140 years ago. A corrupt county commissioner hires a ruthless gothic bounty hunter to get the map from the kid. Very funny/action-y movie. But, since after filming the movie trailer, I decided to make it into a feature-length movie and possibly submit it into a local film festival. For the whole movie plot I wrote a paradigm, shown below. It doesn't include the script (just an event list), which leaves out a lot of the comedy, but you'll be able to find some funny in there. Here you go: "Beginning (Act 1): -We find Jacob Calkins (Main Character) on the shores of the Willamette River in Keizer Rapids Park, on a lounge chair, asleep with a fishing pole in one hand and a root beer spilling on the ground with another. It's sunrise on a Monday morning, and a park ranger comes up to Jacob as he is sleeping, writes a ticket, and slaps him in the head with it to wake him up. The park ranger states that he was getting a ticket for being on park grounds after hours, and Jacob mentions the sun is only starting to set. The park ranger says it is sunrise and shows him the time. Jacob panics, packs up all his stuff, and runs back to the parking lot and hustles off to school. -Marion County Commissioner Alan Richmond is talking to Oregon Governor Ted Kulongowski about the mysterious "disappearance" of over $1 million of county funds for a road maintenance grant, and stating that he (the governor) will be heading an investigation to find this money. After he leaves, Commissioner Richmond tells his assistant (and one of his partners in crime) that they have to replace this money quick or they're screwed. -We also get to meet Spencer Davenport, Jacob's best friend, and the girl of Jacob's dreams, Jennifer Davidson, who's friends with Jacob. Her birthday is coming up, and Jacob wants to throw the ultimate surprise party for her at the Keizer Grange Hall. Toward the end of Act 1, Jacob goes there and asks about renting the place for an afternoon, but the price is way too high for him. Plot Point #1 Jacob arrives at Keizer City Hall (Which is under construction) to pay his ticket. On his way back, he trips over a partially buried strongbox. Curious, he opens it, and finds a map of Keizer, dated 1869, and a letter from the town's founder, John Brooks Keizur. It says he left a fortune buried somewhere in town, where if you draw a line from landmark one to landmark four, and a line from landmark two to landmark three, the point where the lines meet is where it is buried. Problem is, the landmarks in the letter have changed in the last 140 years. Eager to find it, Jacob takes off to the county historical society. -He arrives there, where Commissioner Richmond is talking with historical society director. While leaving, the Commissioner overhears Jacob talking to him about the map. A few days later, the Commissioner tries to bribe Jacob into handing over the map. When that fails, he hires a Gothic bounty hunter name Ethan Steele to retrieve it. Act Two -Jacob and the Historical Society Director find Landmark one. -Ethan Steele tries to con Jacob into giving it to him. When that fails, he tries to rob Jacob at gunpoint.Fortunately, Spencer (who just arrived and saw what happened), sneaks up and beans Steele in the head with a shovel. Jacob and the Historical Society director find plot point two. -One night, Jacob is sitting on the hood of his pickup, stargazing. Jennifer, who was wandering around aimlessly in the park where he was at, finds him and joins him. The two start talking, and eventually Jacob gets feeling really comfortable and mentions his crush on Jennifer. Jennifer mentions she had feelings for him two, and the wind up kissing on the hood of his truck. Jacob and the Historical Society Director find plot point three. He is really obsessed with finding it now. Upset that Jacob is spending all his time on the map, Jennifer blows up at Jacob and tells him that she never wants to see him again. This causes a scene a little after that where Jacob is crying and singing to Sheryl Crow while driving through town. Plot Point #2 (Climax) During Jacob's little karaoke session, Steele breaks into his house and makes off with the map and Jacob's ID. He then proceeds to rob a 7-Eleven and leave Jacob's ID at the scene. Jacob gets arrested the following morning. Spencer sees it the following day on an episode of COPS. -Ethan Steele and the Commissioner use the old county records to find the final landmark. The lines intersect at Keizer Rapids Park. They plan to dig it up tomorrow, and just in case, they kidnap Jennifer as an insurance policy. Act Three (Conclusion) Steele pays Jacob a visit in jail the next morning just to rub it in his face about how he framed him for robbery, kidnapped Jennifer, and is planning to dig up the treasure at Keizer Rapids Park. After seeing his best friend on COPS, Spencer sneaks into the jail and finds Jacob's cell. A police officer sneaks up and points his gun at Spencer, telling him to freeze/ Spencer turns around and unsuccessfully tries to bribe him with a donut. The cops goes to shove him into the cell, but Jacob charges out, they both grab the cop, and force him into the cell, swipe his keys out of the lock and escape, leaving the cop nothing to do but munch on the donut they left behind. They head off on the road to the park, only to be spotted by Ethan Steele, who is en route to meet up with Commissioner Richmond. This sparks a race to the park between Ethan Steele and Jacob and Spencer. Steele wins. Once Steele arrives, he tells the commissioner, who is already digging up the treasure, and has Jennifer tied up right beside him, that they need to move before Jacob gets there and finds out where they are digging. They run off into some nearby woods just as Jacob and Spencer pull up. They chase them down and Jacob and Steele get into a fistfight while Spencer tries to free Jennifer. The Commissioner doubles back to where the treasure was buried and calls the police and tells them to go get Jacob. Jacob wins this epic fight, and they all walk off with Steele, half-conscious, in tow. They come out of the woods just as the police, along with the Historical Society Director and Governor Kulongowski show up. The Commissioner says, "Get him!" but instead he gets arrested, along with Ethan Steele. Jacob and Spencer dig up a chest, and open it.Inside is an old photo album, an old teddy bear, the original deed to the Keizur property, and old baseball and a glove, a locket, a pocket watch, some books, and a note from John Brooks Keizur that reads, "Thank you for taking the time to find my fortunes. Surprised? These things mean the world to me, along with my dear family, whom I love very much. While these may be worthless to you, there's a small reward in the hidden compartment of this chest. Consider it a token of my thanks for digging up my old treasures. I only ask that you give them to a museum so people can feel the same joy as I did when I looked at them." In the small compartment was a sack of gold that back then was worth $5,000. The historical society director offered to let Jacob keep the gold if he could take the rest. Jacob obliged. Also, him and Jennifer make up, and the governor laughs as Spencer tells him the whole story. ("You really tricked a cop with a donut?") Three weeks later, Jacob is asleep at the same spot he was at the beginning of the movie, again with a fishing pole in his hand. Spencer runs up to him and goes, "Jacob! Wake up man, you're gonna miss the party!" Jacob arrives and helps with the last minute decorations. The whole town is there, along with the Historical Society Director and Governor Kulongowski. Jennifer arrives, and has fun for a while, when finally her and Jacob decide to sneak away to the park. (The governor, Spencer, and the Historical Society Director see this, and they just laugh about it), as Jacob and Jennifer drive off into the sunset together. The End" So, what do you guys think? Would it win any awards? Any Comments and criticism is accepted. Whoever can do the best evaluation, though, gets Best answer. Thanks! Well, yeah. This is the list of scenes in the movie. Of course it's long, but we estimate the movie to take approximately 1 hour and 15 minutes.
Movies - 1 Answers - 2009-02-05 22:56:48

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2009-02-05 23:19:20