Is this a good COLLEGE ESSAY? I sent it to all the UCschools..?
I sent this essay to the UC schools. And I was just wondering if you think I'll get in with it. This is only my personal response to the first prompt. thanks for reading it! The sound of a blaring siren is unsuitable for an eight year-old child to wake at six o’clock for school. But if a fire station is located on the corner of the block, there is no alternative. The constant alarm has always been present in my tranquil community of Chino Hills, a region located in Los Angeles. Despite the portrayal of frequent fire emergencies, my hometown is average: the city is not overpopulated, crime rates are somewhat low, and housing costs are fairly standard. Living in my old home was a childhood luxury: I advanced from riding a tricycle to a bicycle, I flew my kite in the winds of the community park, I qualified for my county’s science fair with an experiment involving iodine, my wishes magically came true at 11:11 p.m., I was awarded student of the month multiple times a year, and I created friendships with best friends I still talk to today. My family and I relocated to San Diego in 2002. Specifically in Carmel Valley, my new environment is similar to my prior quiet neighborhood, excluding the fluctuating real estate market. The relaxing city also treated me well for the past seven years: I danced with my crush to Michael Bublé’s “Can’t Help Falling in Love†at Winter Formal, I lose my voice each August at the Van’s Warped Tour, I luckily passed my driver’s license test on my first try, I successfully applied for my first job at the infamous Baskin Robbins in Solana Beach, I was carried home and kissed goodnight by the boy I truly love, and I met each member of The All-American Rejects before their second album’s release. My past shaped all that I am today. I have seen the best, loved the worst, hence my integrity knows it is never a mistake to care for someone. The hardships and fortunes form the vast desires I hold for my future. In my lifetime, I had dreams to be of some assistance to Steve’s hunt on Blue’s Clues, the companion of Clifford (the big red dog), a renowned Pokémon master, an electric guitarist touring alongside Billie Joe Armstrong, a profitable abstract painter, the interpreter of the magical realism presented in Cien años de soledad, that girl named Delilah the Plain White T’s endearingly sang for, Lauren Conrad’s next roommate, Daisy Buchanan of The Great Gatsby, an optometrist, a resident at Frank Warren’s house for PostSecret Sundays, and an influential elementary school teacher, respectively. My ultimate aspiration is to inspire children, while they are still young, into believing they inherently have the intelligence to succeed. My communities of Chino Hills and Carmel Valley have given me the strength and ability to make something of myself. In return, that is my greatest goal in life. I intend to make a difference. After nine months of my teaching, approximately thirty children will realize their dreams are not meant to be followed; they must be chased.
Higher Education (University +) - 4 Answers - 2009-01-01 18:06:20
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You've already sent it, so... stop fretting! = Anyways, if I were editing it, I'd slightly change the first sentence of the last paragraph, to emphasize what the reader might have missed from the preceding paragraph: My ultimate aspiration is to become a teacher to inspire children, ...
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Answer 1
It's a bit disorganized I would say. I don't think "I danced with my crush to Michael Bublé’s “Can’t Help Falling in Love†at Winter Formal, I lose my voice each August at the Van’s Warped Tour, I luckily passed my driver’s license test on my first try" is suitable for a college essay.
2009-01-01 18:14:52
Answer 2
You've already sent it, so... stop fretting! = Anyways, if I were editing it, I'd slightly change the first sentence of the last paragraph, to emphasize what the reader might have missed from the preceding paragraph: My ultimate aspiration is to become a teacher to inspire children, ...
2009-01-01 18:18:43
Answer 3
it's pretty disorganized and it seems like your trying to sound smart, rather than just being natural and saying what you feel...
2009-01-01 23:14:59
Answer 4
I agree with the second answer, I would invert the essay around a little. You went into description of some things that were a little un-called for. The whole deal about writing an essay like this is to not make yourself sound good, but what you feel. If you don't put any feelings into the essay, then the reader would not grasp that feeling also. If you're writing it to complement yourself of all your achievements, which would have already been listed on the transcript, then it would make it sound boring. Be a little humble! Any who, my comment may actually sound negative, but you'd like the truth right? Good luck with everything though!
2009-01-01 23:31:27
Friday, January 7, 2011
Wednesday, January 5, 2011
i need help..long and confusing story. please!!?
i need help..long and confusing story. please!!?
theres this guy that ive been talkin to for about 3 weeks now. im 15 and hes 17 and we go to different schools in different counties and the schools are about 45 minutes away from each other but im fixin to move to where he lives. the first week we started talkin, he got my number from a friend of his that i used to kinda talk to. me and this guy, well call him joe, went to middle school together but havent seen each other since then. well me and joe started talkin and that first week we talked all the time. i would wake up to txts sayin stuff like good mornin beautiful and other really sweet stuff like that. one of the first things he said to me was 'we should go out' and i told him that i wanted to get to know him better first. so then that weekend, we hung out for the first time. my dad met his parents and then me and joe went huntin and then to a party. at that party, he stayed with me the whole time either holdin my hand or his arm around me or somethin. and we sat by the fire and i stood in him arms out by his truck. and around some of his friends hoe would say stuff like 'wheres my girlfriend' or 'oh theres my gf' and stuff. it was just really great. so then he took me home and said hed txt me and good night and stuff. well the next week i hardly heard from him. an occasional txt here or there but wayy less than the week before. so that friday night i went to his football game, he had asked me too last weekend, and like right after he txted me and asked if i was there. i said yea and then the next day he txted me and wanted to hang out, so we did. he came and picked me up and we went and parked somewhere and just chilled. yea we made out too. while we were out there, he told me that he liked me too much to think...something i dont remember. anyways, then we went to mcdonalds and he took me home and again said hed txt me. well later that night i txted him and asked him if he really did like me and he was like 'yes i do' and i was like 'oh cool yea for what it means i like you too = ]'. then this past week i think i heard from him once. i went to his game again this past fri night and he saw me and i caught him starin, but i didnt look back cuz i was talkin to a girl friend. but this weekend we didnt hang out at all..i havent even heard from him. now i dont know what to do because i really like him. i cant decide if i should txt him and just ask him what callin me his girlfriend meant and if the offer to go out still stands and that i really like him, or if i should not txt him and get him to txt me. because i have had that work in multiple cases before. i would talk to a guy like alot and then we would like stop talkin and then i would hear from them and they would almost always like me after that. once guy even said he would date me but that i lived too far away (like and hour and a half). but i just dont know what to about joe. txt him or not? any advice would be awesome! thanks yall
Singles & Dating - 1 Answers - 2008-11-09 14:45:17
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i think you should text him first. but honesty i dont like the hunting part cause all animals deserve lives.
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i think you should text him first. but honesty i dont like the hunting part cause all animals deserve lives.
2008-11-09 14:51:20
theres this guy that ive been talkin to for about 3 weeks now. im 15 and hes 17 and we go to different schools in different counties and the schools are about 45 minutes away from each other but im fixin to move to where he lives. the first week we started talkin, he got my number from a friend of his that i used to kinda talk to. me and this guy, well call him joe, went to middle school together but havent seen each other since then. well me and joe started talkin and that first week we talked all the time. i would wake up to txts sayin stuff like good mornin beautiful and other really sweet stuff like that. one of the first things he said to me was 'we should go out' and i told him that i wanted to get to know him better first. so then that weekend, we hung out for the first time. my dad met his parents and then me and joe went huntin and then to a party. at that party, he stayed with me the whole time either holdin my hand or his arm around me or somethin. and we sat by the fire and i stood in him arms out by his truck. and around some of his friends hoe would say stuff like 'wheres my girlfriend' or 'oh theres my gf' and stuff. it was just really great. so then he took me home and said hed txt me and good night and stuff. well the next week i hardly heard from him. an occasional txt here or there but wayy less than the week before. so that friday night i went to his football game, he had asked me too last weekend, and like right after he txted me and asked if i was there. i said yea and then the next day he txted me and wanted to hang out, so we did. he came and picked me up and we went and parked somewhere and just chilled. yea we made out too. while we were out there, he told me that he liked me too much to think...something i dont remember. anyways, then we went to mcdonalds and he took me home and again said hed txt me. well later that night i txted him and asked him if he really did like me and he was like 'yes i do' and i was like 'oh cool yea for what it means i like you too = ]'. then this past week i think i heard from him once. i went to his game again this past fri night and he saw me and i caught him starin, but i didnt look back cuz i was talkin to a girl friend. but this weekend we didnt hang out at all..i havent even heard from him. now i dont know what to do because i really like him. i cant decide if i should txt him and just ask him what callin me his girlfriend meant and if the offer to go out still stands and that i really like him, or if i should not txt him and get him to txt me. because i have had that work in multiple cases before. i would talk to a guy like alot and then we would like stop talkin and then i would hear from them and they would almost always like me after that. once guy even said he would date me but that i lived too far away (like and hour and a half). but i just dont know what to about joe. txt him or not? any advice would be awesome! thanks yall
Singles & Dating - 1 Answers - 2008-11-09 14:45:17
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i think you should text him first. but honesty i dont like the hunting part cause all animals deserve lives.
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i think you should text him first. but honesty i dont like the hunting part cause all animals deserve lives.
2008-11-09 14:51:20
Monday, January 3, 2011
i really need help!! please! soo confused..?
i really need help!! please! soo confused..?
theres this guy that ive been talkin to for about 3 weeks now. im 15 and hes 17 and we go to different schools in different counties and the schools are about 45 minutes away from each other but im fixin to move to where he lives. the first week we started talkin, he got my number from a friend of his that i used to kinda talk to. me and this guy, well call him joe, went to middle school together but havent seen each other since then. well me and joe started talkin and that first week we talked all the time. i would wake up to txts sayin stuff like good mornin beautiful and other really sweet stuff like that. one of the first things he said to me was 'we should go out' and i told him that i wanted to get to know him better first. so then that weekend, we hung out for the first time. my dad met his parents and then me and joe went huntin and then to a party. at that party, he stayed with me the whole time either holdin my hand or his arm around me or somethin. and we sat by the fire and i stood in him arms out by his truck. and around some of his friends hoe would say stuff like 'wheres my girlfriend' or 'oh theres my gf' and stuff. it was just really great. so then he took me home and said hed txt me and good night and stuff. well the next week i hardly heard from him. an occasional txt here or there but wayy less than the week before. so that friday night i went to his football game, he had asked me too last weekend, and like right after he txted me and asked if i was there. i said yea and then the next day he txted me and wanted to hang out, so we did. he came and picked me up and we went and parked somewhere and just chilled. yea we made out too. while we were out there, he told me that he liked me too much to think...something i dont remember. anyways, then we went to mcdonalds and he took me home and again said hed txt me. well later that night i txted him and asked him if he really did like me and he was like 'yes i do' and i was like 'oh cool yea for what it means i like you too = ]'. then this past week i think i heard from him once. i went to his game again this past fri night and he saw me and i caught him starin, but i didnt look back cuz i was talkin to a girl friend. but this weekend we didnt hang out at all..i havent even heard from him. now i dont know what to do because i really like him. i cant decide if i should txt him and just ask him what callin me his girlfriend meant and if the offer to go out still stands and that i really like him, or if i should not txt him and get him to txt me. because i have had that work in multiple cases before. i would talk to a guy like alot and then we would like stop talkin and then i would hear from them and they would almost always like me after that. once guy even said he would date me but that i lived too far away (like and hour and a half). but i just dont know what to about joe. txt him or not? any advice would be awesome! thanks yall
Singles & Dating - 4 Answers - 2008-11-09 15:19:47
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Hmmm, I think that you should wait until he texts you. If he doesn't text you back in two days then that's when I think that you should take action. I know it's gonna be hard to wait but you have to be patient and try to take your mind off the situation. Try hanging out with your friends, go to the movies or do something to keep yourself busy and watch hopefully when you least expect it you'll receive a text from Joe. I hope things work out (:
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Answer 1
just txt him and c wat happens
2008-11-09 15:26:26
Answer 2
Yea. I'd just ask him. more than likely it sounds like he wants to go out with you, especially if he called you his girlfriend. Why wait for him to make the first move, guys like it when girls make the first move sometimes too. goodluck.
2008-11-09 15:26:51
Answer 3
i know you want to text him. just do that. its better for you to know the answer rather than wondering the reason. its not like you're the one who confessed the feelings first. I've there b4 and it will not be embarrassing at all coz he is the one that say 'i like you'. but you need to know when he said that he like you, know for sure he likes you as a fren or more than that. Analise the situation b4 you act. good luck OK..
2008-11-09 15:35:46
Answer 4
Hmmm, I think that you should wait until he texts you. If he doesn't text you back in two days then that's when I think that you should take action. I know it's gonna be hard to wait but you have to be patient and try to take your mind off the situation. Try hanging out with your friends, go to the movies or do something to keep yourself busy and watch hopefully when you least expect it you'll receive a text from Joe. I hope things work out (:
2008-11-09 15:36:54
theres this guy that ive been talkin to for about 3 weeks now. im 15 and hes 17 and we go to different schools in different counties and the schools are about 45 minutes away from each other but im fixin to move to where he lives. the first week we started talkin, he got my number from a friend of his that i used to kinda talk to. me and this guy, well call him joe, went to middle school together but havent seen each other since then. well me and joe started talkin and that first week we talked all the time. i would wake up to txts sayin stuff like good mornin beautiful and other really sweet stuff like that. one of the first things he said to me was 'we should go out' and i told him that i wanted to get to know him better first. so then that weekend, we hung out for the first time. my dad met his parents and then me and joe went huntin and then to a party. at that party, he stayed with me the whole time either holdin my hand or his arm around me or somethin. and we sat by the fire and i stood in him arms out by his truck. and around some of his friends hoe would say stuff like 'wheres my girlfriend' or 'oh theres my gf' and stuff. it was just really great. so then he took me home and said hed txt me and good night and stuff. well the next week i hardly heard from him. an occasional txt here or there but wayy less than the week before. so that friday night i went to his football game, he had asked me too last weekend, and like right after he txted me and asked if i was there. i said yea and then the next day he txted me and wanted to hang out, so we did. he came and picked me up and we went and parked somewhere and just chilled. yea we made out too. while we were out there, he told me that he liked me too much to think...something i dont remember. anyways, then we went to mcdonalds and he took me home and again said hed txt me. well later that night i txted him and asked him if he really did like me and he was like 'yes i do' and i was like 'oh cool yea for what it means i like you too = ]'. then this past week i think i heard from him once. i went to his game again this past fri night and he saw me and i caught him starin, but i didnt look back cuz i was talkin to a girl friend. but this weekend we didnt hang out at all..i havent even heard from him. now i dont know what to do because i really like him. i cant decide if i should txt him and just ask him what callin me his girlfriend meant and if the offer to go out still stands and that i really like him, or if i should not txt him and get him to txt me. because i have had that work in multiple cases before. i would talk to a guy like alot and then we would like stop talkin and then i would hear from them and they would almost always like me after that. once guy even said he would date me but that i lived too far away (like and hour and a half). but i just dont know what to about joe. txt him or not? any advice would be awesome! thanks yall
Singles & Dating - 4 Answers - 2008-11-09 15:19:47
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Hmmm, I think that you should wait until he texts you. If he doesn't text you back in two days then that's when I think that you should take action. I know it's gonna be hard to wait but you have to be patient and try to take your mind off the situation. Try hanging out with your friends, go to the movies or do something to keep yourself busy and watch hopefully when you least expect it you'll receive a text from Joe. I hope things work out (:
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Answer 1
just txt him and c wat happens
2008-11-09 15:26:26
Answer 2
Yea. I'd just ask him. more than likely it sounds like he wants to go out with you, especially if he called you his girlfriend. Why wait for him to make the first move, guys like it when girls make the first move sometimes too. goodluck.
2008-11-09 15:26:51
Answer 3
i know you want to text him. just do that. its better for you to know the answer rather than wondering the reason. its not like you're the one who confessed the feelings first. I've there b4 and it will not be embarrassing at all coz he is the one that say 'i like you'. but you need to know when he said that he like you, know for sure he likes you as a fren or more than that. Analise the situation b4 you act. good luck OK..
2008-11-09 15:35:46
Answer 4
Hmmm, I think that you should wait until he texts you. If he doesn't text you back in two days then that's when I think that you should take action. I know it's gonna be hard to wait but you have to be patient and try to take your mind off the situation. Try hanging out with your friends, go to the movies or do something to keep yourself busy and watch hopefully when you least expect it you'll receive a text from Joe. I hope things work out (:
2008-11-09 15:36:54
Saturday, January 1, 2011
Do you guys think this would be a good movie plot?
Do you guys think this would be a good movie plot?
I'm in an Advanced Video Productions Class at school, and as a finals project last semester we made movie trailers. Mine was simply an action/comedy that I titled. "Fortunes". The basic summary is that this kid accidentally stumbles upon a map to a fortune buried by the town founder 140 years ago. A corrupt county commissioner hires a ruthless gothic bounty hunter to get the map from the kid. Very funny/action-y movie. But, since after filming the movie trailer, I decided to make it into a feature-length movie and possibly submit it into a local film festival. For the whole movie plot I wrote a paradigm, shown below. It doesn't include the script (just an event list), which leaves out a lot of the comedy, but you'll be able to find some funny in there. Here you go: "Beginning (Act 1): -We find Jacob Calkins (Main Character) on the shores of the Willamette River in Keizer Rapids Park, on a lounge chair, asleep with a fishing pole in one hand and a root beer spilling on the ground with another. It's sunrise on a Monday morning, and a park ranger comes up to Jacob as he is sleeping, writes a ticket, and slaps him in the head with it to wake him up. The park ranger states that he was getting a ticket for being on park grounds after hours, and Jacob mentions the sun is only starting to set. The park ranger says it is sunrise and shows him the time. Jacob panics, packs up all his stuff, and runs back to the parking lot and hustles off to school. -Marion County Commissioner Alan Richmond is talking to Oregon Governor Ted Kulongowski about the mysterious "disappearance" of over $1 million of county funds for a road maintenance grant, and stating that he (the governor) will be heading an investigation to find this money. After he leaves, Commissioner Richmond tells his assistant (and one of his partners in crime) that they have to replace this money quick or they're screwed. -We also get to meet Spencer Davenport, Jacob's best friend, and the girl of Jacob's dreams, Jennifer Davidson, who's friends with Jacob. Her birthday is coming up, and Jacob wants to throw the ultimate surprise party for her at the Keizer Grange Hall. Toward the end of Act 1, Jacob goes there and asks about renting the place for an afternoon, but the price is way too high for him. Plot Point #1 Jacob arrives at Keizer City Hall (Which is under construction) to pay his ticket. On his way back, he trips over a partially buried strongbox. Curious, he opens it, and finds a map of Keizer, dated 1869, and a letter from the town's founder, John Brooks Keizur. It says he left a fortune buried somewhere in town, where if you draw a line from landmark one to landmark four, and a line from landmark two to landmark three, the point where the lines meet is where it is buried. Problem is, the landmarks in the letter have changed in the last 140 years. Eager to find it, Jacob takes off to the county historical society. -He arrives there, where Commissioner Richmond is talking with historical society director. While leaving, the Commissioner overhears Jacob talking to him about the map. A few days later, the Commissioner tries to bribe Jacob into handing over the map. When that fails, he hires a Gothic bounty hunter name Ethan Steele to retrieve it. Act Two -Jacob and the Historical Society Director find Landmark one. -Ethan Steele tries to con Jacob into giving it to him. When that fails, he tries to rob Jacob at gunpoint.Fortunately, Spencer (who just arrived and saw what happened), sneaks up and beans Steele in the head with a shovel. Jacob and the Historical Society director find plot point two. -One night, Jacob is sitting on the hood of his pickup, stargazing. Jennifer, who was wandering around aimlessly in the park where he was at, finds him and joins him. The two start talking, and eventually Jacob gets feeling really comfortable and mentions his crush on Jennifer. Jennifer mentions she had feelings for him two, and the wind up kissing on the hood of his truck. Jacob and the Historical Society Director find plot point three. He is really obsessed with finding it now. Upset that Jacob is spending all his time on the map, Jennifer blows up at Jacob and tells him that she never wants to see him again. This causes a scene a little after that where Jacob is crying and singing to Sheryl Crow while driving through town. Plot Point #2 (Climax) During Jacob's little karaoke session, Steele breaks into his house and makes off with the map and Jacob's ID. He then proceeds to rob a 7-Eleven and leave Jacob's ID at the scene. Jacob gets arrested the following morning. Spencer sees it the following day on an episode of COPS. -Ethan Steele and the Commissioner use the old county records to find the final landmark. The lines intersect at Keizer Rapids Park. They plan to dig it up tomorrow, and just in case, they kidnap Jennifer as an insurance policy. Act Three (Conclusion) Steele pays Jacob a visit in jail the next morning just to rub it in his face about how he framed him for robbery, kidnapped Jennifer, and is planning to dig up the treasure at Keizer Rapids Park. After seeing his best friend on COPS, Spencer sneaks into the jail and finds Jacob's cell. A police officer sneaks up and points his gun at Spencer, telling him to freeze/ Spencer turns around and unsuccessfully tries to bribe him with a donut. The cops goes to shove him into the cell, but Jacob charges out, they both grab the cop, and force him into the cell, swipe his keys out of the lock and escape, leaving the cop nothing to do but munch on the donut they left behind. They head off on the road to the park, only to be spotted by Ethan Steele, who is en route to meet up with Commissioner Richmond. This sparks a race to the park between Ethan Steele and Jacob and Spencer. Steele wins. Once Steele arrives, he tells the commissioner, who is already digging up the treasure, and has Jennifer tied up right beside him, that they need to move before Jacob gets there and finds out where they are digging. They run off into some nearby woods just as Jacob and Spencer pull up. They chase them down and Jacob and Steele get into a fistfight while Spencer tries to free Jennifer. The Commissioner doubles back to where the treasure was buried and calls the police and tells them to go get Jacob. Jacob wins this epic fight, and they all walk off with Steele, half-conscious, in tow. They come out of the woods just as the police, along with the Historical Society Director and Governor Kulongowski show up. The Commissioner says, "Get him!" but instead he gets arrested, along with Ethan Steele. Jacob and Spencer dig up a chest, and open it.Inside is an old photo album, an old teddy bear, the original deed to the Keizur property, and old baseball and a glove, a locket, a pocket watch, some books, and a note from John Brooks Keizur that reads, "Thank you for taking the time to find my fortunes. Surprised? These things mean the world to me, along with my dear family, whom I love very much. While these may be worthless to you, there's a small reward in the hidden compartment of this chest. Consider it a token of my thanks for digging up my old treasures. I only ask that you give them to a museum so people can feel the same joy as I did when I looked at them." In the small compartment was a sack of gold that back then was worth $5,000. The historical society director offered to let Jacob keep the gold if he could take the rest. Jacob obliged. Also, him and Jennifer make up, and the governor laughs as Spencer tells him the whole story. ("You really tricked a cop with a donut?") Three weeks later, Jacob is asleep at the same spot he was at the beginning of the movie, again with a fishing pole in his hand. Spencer runs up to him and goes, "Jacob! Wake up man, you're gonna miss the party!" Jacob arrives and helps with the last minute decorations. The whole town is there, along with the Historical Society Director and Governor Kulongowski. Jennifer arrives, and has fun for a while, when finally her and Jacob decide to sneak away to the park. (The governor, Spencer, and the Historical Society Director see this, and they just laugh about it), as Jacob and Jennifer drive off into the sunset together. The End" So, what do you guys think? Would it win any awards? Any Comments and criticism is accepted. Whoever can do the best evaluation, though, gets Best answer. Thanks! Well, yeah. This is the list of scenes in the movie. Of course it's long, but we estimate the movie to take approximately 1 hour and 15 minutes.
Movies - 1 Answers - 2009-02-05 22:56:48
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it is so long! http://www.dvd4online.com
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it is so long! http://www.dvd4online.com
2009-02-05 23:19:20
I'm in an Advanced Video Productions Class at school, and as a finals project last semester we made movie trailers. Mine was simply an action/comedy that I titled. "Fortunes". The basic summary is that this kid accidentally stumbles upon a map to a fortune buried by the town founder 140 years ago. A corrupt county commissioner hires a ruthless gothic bounty hunter to get the map from the kid. Very funny/action-y movie. But, since after filming the movie trailer, I decided to make it into a feature-length movie and possibly submit it into a local film festival. For the whole movie plot I wrote a paradigm, shown below. It doesn't include the script (just an event list), which leaves out a lot of the comedy, but you'll be able to find some funny in there. Here you go: "Beginning (Act 1): -We find Jacob Calkins (Main Character) on the shores of the Willamette River in Keizer Rapids Park, on a lounge chair, asleep with a fishing pole in one hand and a root beer spilling on the ground with another. It's sunrise on a Monday morning, and a park ranger comes up to Jacob as he is sleeping, writes a ticket, and slaps him in the head with it to wake him up. The park ranger states that he was getting a ticket for being on park grounds after hours, and Jacob mentions the sun is only starting to set. The park ranger says it is sunrise and shows him the time. Jacob panics, packs up all his stuff, and runs back to the parking lot and hustles off to school. -Marion County Commissioner Alan Richmond is talking to Oregon Governor Ted Kulongowski about the mysterious "disappearance" of over $1 million of county funds for a road maintenance grant, and stating that he (the governor) will be heading an investigation to find this money. After he leaves, Commissioner Richmond tells his assistant (and one of his partners in crime) that they have to replace this money quick or they're screwed. -We also get to meet Spencer Davenport, Jacob's best friend, and the girl of Jacob's dreams, Jennifer Davidson, who's friends with Jacob. Her birthday is coming up, and Jacob wants to throw the ultimate surprise party for her at the Keizer Grange Hall. Toward the end of Act 1, Jacob goes there and asks about renting the place for an afternoon, but the price is way too high for him. Plot Point #1 Jacob arrives at Keizer City Hall (Which is under construction) to pay his ticket. On his way back, he trips over a partially buried strongbox. Curious, he opens it, and finds a map of Keizer, dated 1869, and a letter from the town's founder, John Brooks Keizur. It says he left a fortune buried somewhere in town, where if you draw a line from landmark one to landmark four, and a line from landmark two to landmark three, the point where the lines meet is where it is buried. Problem is, the landmarks in the letter have changed in the last 140 years. Eager to find it, Jacob takes off to the county historical society. -He arrives there, where Commissioner Richmond is talking with historical society director. While leaving, the Commissioner overhears Jacob talking to him about the map. A few days later, the Commissioner tries to bribe Jacob into handing over the map. When that fails, he hires a Gothic bounty hunter name Ethan Steele to retrieve it. Act Two -Jacob and the Historical Society Director find Landmark one. -Ethan Steele tries to con Jacob into giving it to him. When that fails, he tries to rob Jacob at gunpoint.Fortunately, Spencer (who just arrived and saw what happened), sneaks up and beans Steele in the head with a shovel. Jacob and the Historical Society director find plot point two. -One night, Jacob is sitting on the hood of his pickup, stargazing. Jennifer, who was wandering around aimlessly in the park where he was at, finds him and joins him. The two start talking, and eventually Jacob gets feeling really comfortable and mentions his crush on Jennifer. Jennifer mentions she had feelings for him two, and the wind up kissing on the hood of his truck. Jacob and the Historical Society Director find plot point three. He is really obsessed with finding it now. Upset that Jacob is spending all his time on the map, Jennifer blows up at Jacob and tells him that she never wants to see him again. This causes a scene a little after that where Jacob is crying and singing to Sheryl Crow while driving through town. Plot Point #2 (Climax) During Jacob's little karaoke session, Steele breaks into his house and makes off with the map and Jacob's ID. He then proceeds to rob a 7-Eleven and leave Jacob's ID at the scene. Jacob gets arrested the following morning. Spencer sees it the following day on an episode of COPS. -Ethan Steele and the Commissioner use the old county records to find the final landmark. The lines intersect at Keizer Rapids Park. They plan to dig it up tomorrow, and just in case, they kidnap Jennifer as an insurance policy. Act Three (Conclusion) Steele pays Jacob a visit in jail the next morning just to rub it in his face about how he framed him for robbery, kidnapped Jennifer, and is planning to dig up the treasure at Keizer Rapids Park. After seeing his best friend on COPS, Spencer sneaks into the jail and finds Jacob's cell. A police officer sneaks up and points his gun at Spencer, telling him to freeze/ Spencer turns around and unsuccessfully tries to bribe him with a donut. The cops goes to shove him into the cell, but Jacob charges out, they both grab the cop, and force him into the cell, swipe his keys out of the lock and escape, leaving the cop nothing to do but munch on the donut they left behind. They head off on the road to the park, only to be spotted by Ethan Steele, who is en route to meet up with Commissioner Richmond. This sparks a race to the park between Ethan Steele and Jacob and Spencer. Steele wins. Once Steele arrives, he tells the commissioner, who is already digging up the treasure, and has Jennifer tied up right beside him, that they need to move before Jacob gets there and finds out where they are digging. They run off into some nearby woods just as Jacob and Spencer pull up. They chase them down and Jacob and Steele get into a fistfight while Spencer tries to free Jennifer. The Commissioner doubles back to where the treasure was buried and calls the police and tells them to go get Jacob. Jacob wins this epic fight, and they all walk off with Steele, half-conscious, in tow. They come out of the woods just as the police, along with the Historical Society Director and Governor Kulongowski show up. The Commissioner says, "Get him!" but instead he gets arrested, along with Ethan Steele. Jacob and Spencer dig up a chest, and open it.Inside is an old photo album, an old teddy bear, the original deed to the Keizur property, and old baseball and a glove, a locket, a pocket watch, some books, and a note from John Brooks Keizur that reads, "Thank you for taking the time to find my fortunes. Surprised? These things mean the world to me, along with my dear family, whom I love very much. While these may be worthless to you, there's a small reward in the hidden compartment of this chest. Consider it a token of my thanks for digging up my old treasures. I only ask that you give them to a museum so people can feel the same joy as I did when I looked at them." In the small compartment was a sack of gold that back then was worth $5,000. The historical society director offered to let Jacob keep the gold if he could take the rest. Jacob obliged. Also, him and Jennifer make up, and the governor laughs as Spencer tells him the whole story. ("You really tricked a cop with a donut?") Three weeks later, Jacob is asleep at the same spot he was at the beginning of the movie, again with a fishing pole in his hand. Spencer runs up to him and goes, "Jacob! Wake up man, you're gonna miss the party!" Jacob arrives and helps with the last minute decorations. The whole town is there, along with the Historical Society Director and Governor Kulongowski. Jennifer arrives, and has fun for a while, when finally her and Jacob decide to sneak away to the park. (The governor, Spencer, and the Historical Society Director see this, and they just laugh about it), as Jacob and Jennifer drive off into the sunset together. The End" So, what do you guys think? Would it win any awards? Any Comments and criticism is accepted. Whoever can do the best evaluation, though, gets Best answer. Thanks! Well, yeah. This is the list of scenes in the movie. Of course it's long, but we estimate the movie to take approximately 1 hour and 15 minutes.
Movies - 1 Answers - 2009-02-05 22:56:48
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it is so long! http://www.dvd4online.com
2009-02-05 23:19:20
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