Please help me im trying to get into this high-school is my essay okay!!! please help it means alot?

Please help me im trying to get into this high-school is my essay okay!!! please help it means alot?
okay im in the 8th grade and im trying to get into this school please help me! Be nice about how I write im only in the 8th grade: As I have grown older I have realized something very important, That when you have a chance to pursue your dreams. To take that chance of doing your dream. That chance is in front of me, and I'm willing to do everything I can, to do what ive always wanted to do. I can see myself being happy, knowing I'm doing what ive always wanted to do. If I can be apart of your culinary arts program, I can assure you I will strive to do my best. I will show you what I can do, and my knowledge of culinary arts. What I hope to get out of this school, is not just a great experience, but a career as well. When I cook all my problems and my thoughts fade away. I feel that I’m achieving something, and doing it because it’s my passion. When I was younger I was always in the kitchen with my mom. Helping her cook, and learning the proper way to cook. I have always felt that cooking is another form of art, you can make a delicious masterpiece, and call it your own. To be proud of what you made, and to be able to share it with others, and to get feed back from them, and improve your masterpiece. To make it the best it can ever be. Although I have learned many things about culinary arts, there is much more to learn. To get deeper inside of the art of cooking. To understand why there are some necessities you must follow. Learning is very important for the mind. The more you learn, the stronger the mind. I hope that I can learn all the essentials in culinary arts. As quoted: “All great achievements require time” (Maya Angelou). To me this means that, to be good at what you do, you must have the time and patience to do it. You cant rush through it, it takes time and practice. As my dad always says to me “practice makes perfect”. Even though one can never be perfect, they can still be at the acme point in there lives. I believe everyone can learn something new. I hope that I can wake up every morning, and go to work doing what I love. Sharing my recipes with others, smelling the aromas, tasting the mouth watering food. Hearing the pan sizzling, and seeing the piece of art I have created, would make my life complete. To me cooking is more than skill, its a passion. To have my own restaurant, with the food I have created, having customers, happy with a full stomach. Would make my days even brighter. What I hope to gain from Sussex County Technical School, is an education to expand my knowledge in culinary arts, and do what I love which is to cook. I believe that if I stay focus, and take my time in your culinary classes, I won't let you down. I have so much passion for this there is no way to describe it. I feel like I can do anything when I am cooking, and always looking to do something in the kitchen. Because I want to be the best that I can be. When I grow older, I will still pursue my dream of being a chef. Not a cook but a chef. I want to be one of the top chefs that has ever lived. After I graduate High School, I hope to go to the Institute Of Culinary Education, in New York. To use the skills I hope to get from your school. I want to make the right choices for myself, and to become successful person. Over my middle school experience I have become a bit more open, to do more things. I have joined h2h (here to help), a program ran by my school to help the community, and to give back to others. I also recently signed up for lacrosse for this years season. I was also a cheerleader for three years. I’m looking forward to learning new things, and working well with other people in activities. I know in the future, I will join more clubs to get involved with the school. Such as yearbook and photography. I think getting involved with clubs, can teach you life lessons, on how to work well with others, and develop communication skills, and most of all to be yourself. I hope by me coming to your school, will help my dreams come true, and to guide me through my high-school years. ©
Primary & Secondary Education - 3 Answers - 2009-01-14 15:19:40

Best Answer
very good! argh my least favorite part of getting into any school! well there are some punctuation errors, so fix those because computers dont always pick them up. also read it out loud to make sure its understandable to others. good luck!

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Answer 1
it is pretty good, although there are some punctuation mistakes
2009-01-14 15:25:27

Answer 2
very good! argh my least favorite part of getting into any school! well there are some punctuation errors, so fix those because computers dont always pick them up. also read it out loud to make sure its understandable to others. good luck!
2009-01-14 15:31:26

Answer 3
Sounds good, though a little bit un-original. If you want to stand out to something they probably haven't heard before. Good luck :)
2009-01-14 15:58:21